“This is silly,” Lori pouts. “Why don’t we go to my place? We can summon the dead with my Ouija board.”
“Oh, little Lori’s scared,” Brian mocks. He gooses her in the ribs, and she squeals indignantly. “Don’t worry, baby, I’ll protect you.”
Trixie gazes at the headstones surrounding them, eyes wide. It’s foggy and cool tonight, and anything, dead, alive, undead, could be hiding in that fog. She feels exposed, watched. She hugs Don’s arm tighter to her side.
Don scans his flashlight across the graveyard.
“Over here,” he says. “This is the oldest part. These graves go back at least two hundred years.” He leads them to a flat, rectangular monument beneath an ancient oak tree. They jump up to sit on its marble surface.
“Awesome,” Brian says. “It’s like one of those altars where they sacrifice virgins to the devil.” He gives his best evil laugh, and Lori punches his shoulder.
“Well, we’re all safe from that fate,” Don says, “unless there’s something you’d like to share, Brian.” Their laughter calms their nerves.
“Where’s that beer, Don?” Lori says, holding out her hand. Don grins and passes bottles to each of them.
“Lucky for you Trixie has a boyfriend old enough to buy beer,” he observes.
“That’s not why you’re my boyfriend,” Trixie says with a smile. She sips her beer, eyes still roaming the graveyard. Her face is pale as the fog, her large eyes black as the oak tree towering above them. Don leans in to kiss her cheek.
“You look awfully witchy tonight,” he whispers. “I like it.”
“I wonder who’s buried under here,” Lori says.
“Good question.” Brian takes the flashlight and gets down to read the inscription. After a moment he says, “That’s weird. It’s only symbols, like runes or hieroglyphs. I can’t make it out. Oh, I know, it’s a secret alien base, and you can only get in if you can read the pass codes.”
“You’re such a geek,” Lori giggles.
“It doesn’t matter what it says or who’s buried here, not really,” Trixie says. “I’m sure the occupant is past caring who comes to visit. Come back up, Brian. You’re making me nervous down there.”
“What? You don’t really think a zombie’s gonna grab me, do you?” But he climbs back onto the monument nevertheless.
They are quiet for a few moments, drinking their beer, watching the fog move silently in tatters and swirls. It is like a living thing.
“Let’s tell ghost stories,” Don says. “We can’t waste such a perfect opportunity.”
Lori shudders. “It’s scary enough out here. You don’t want me to die of fright, do you?”
“I know a good one,” Trixie says. She looks at the fog, at the ancient oak, at the monument. She runs her hand over the cold marble. She smiles up at her friends; they watch her expectantly.
“It’s about who’s buried under this monument. You know,” she leans in confidentially, “this grave’s been here almost three hundred years, long before they first built the proper graveyard.”
Don, Brian and Lori look suspiciously at the monument. Lori clings to Brian with a whimper.
“A powerful witch is buried here,” Trixie continues. “They say if you dance on her monument, she’ll come back and grant you a wish. But first you have to tell her story.”
“Which is?” Don says.
“She fell in love with the governor’s son. He promised to marry her, but his father refused and forced him to marry the mayor’s daughter. So she lured her lover here on his wedding night to have one last dance with her. In the morning, the bride was dead and the witch had disappeared. The governor’s son built this monument for the witch, thinking she was dead, too. They say he came back to dance here every year after that until he died a very old man.”
“And because he remembered her like that, she gave him long life?” Brian says. Trixie shrugs.
“They never found the witch,” she tells them. “Maybe she’s not buried here at all. Maybe when you dance on her grave it’s just summoning her, like a spell. Then the wish part isn’t a wish at all, but a bargain. She’ll do something for you, but you have to give her something in return.”
“Like what?” Lori shivers.
“Part of your soul,” Trixie says, and they all laugh. “You get whatever you want for a year, but then she takes your essence. They say it makes her immortal, and she’s walking around here even now.”
The fog drifts around them, cool and moist. The oak keeps its secrets.
“Well, I think we should dance.” Brian gets up and pulls Lori to her feet. “I could use a big stack of money, myself.”
“And I want to ace my finals,” Lori says. Don gets up and holds his hand out to Trixie.
“I don’t really need or want anything, but I’ll dance because I like the story,” he says. Trixie smiles at him, surprised.
“In that case, maybe the witch will give you a long and happy life,” she tells him. She thinks, Maybe I’ll keep this one around for a while.
They dance on the empty monument under the watchful oak, and the fog dances with them.
As they dance, Trixie feels her blood race, suffusing her body with new vitality. She casts her vision into the next day, the next week. She sees Lori and Brian getting their wishes, the proper payment for their dancing. And by the time their obligations to her come due, they will have forgotten this night, this dance.
The bargain gets easier to make every year.
But it’s rare to find someone who will dance, asking nothing in return. Don’s reward will be generous indeed.
Even as they dance, Trixie tailors her old immortality spell to suit her new chosen mate.
Joanie
October 21, 2010
Awesome! I didn’t see that ending coming at all! I really like the witch’s story – I think that was the best part. It was also nice to see the twist with Don being the one guy to actually be content with what he has and just be glad to dance for the story. I know this is just a one-shot but I would love to see what happens next. 🙂 This is an awesome short story!
You do write horror so well, my dear! I tip my hat to thee! *bow*
Jason Warden
October 21, 2010
This is very, very good. I love the ending. You knocked this one out of the park. Bravo!!
Eric J. Krause
October 21, 2010
Very cool story! The ending was awesome. Quite a payoff that I didn’t see coming. Well done!
Carrie Clevenger
October 21, 2010
I love Halloween tales and this was no exception Grace. ❤
shannon esposito
October 21, 2010
It made me think of that song “I Hope You Dance”. Dancing for dancing sake should be rewarded! This made me want to be young and hanging out in graveyards again. 🙂
Danielle La Paglia
October 21, 2010
What a wonderfully witchy tale! Great job, Grace! 🙂
Cathy Webster
October 21, 2010
This is as romantic as anything I’ve read lately:
Her face is pale as the fog, her large eyes black as the oak tree towering above them. Don leans in to kiss her cheek.
“You look awfully witchy tonight,” he whispers. “I like it.”
I’m with Don – I like this, too.
J. Dane Tyler
October 21, 2010
Beautiful. Just gorgeous. I like it.
Shall we dance?
John Wiswell
October 22, 2010
I’m writing this during the first paragraph. I love this protest. We can summon the dead at my place. Such a mix of the outlandish and normal into a whine that doesn’t annoy. I sincerely love that.
Okay, going to read the rest of the story now.
Enjoyed where you took it, Grace. Obviously gains more conviction as it goes along. Maybe one or two more convictions coming, if the authorities hear of this.
Laurita
October 22, 2010
Brilliant. I loved every line of this. A stunning concept, beautifully executed.
flyingscribbler
October 22, 2010
Love the fog dancing with them on the monument. What a great story.You really conjure up a very good description of a dark and eerie graveyard.
Deanna Schrayer
October 22, 2010
Wonderful ghost story with perfect dialogue Grace. I figured it out when she said “…she’s walking around here…” but still a fantastic reveal.
I especially love this line: “The oak keeps its secrets.”
Rachel Blackbirdsong
October 22, 2010
So glad I didn’t read this before bedtime Grace. Great dialog and the love the idea that trees keep secrets. I actually believe that’s true. I spent part of my childhood living in Tarrytown, NY, which is the home of Sleepy Hollow. I often played in the Hollow with my other friends and I swear some of those trees were scary as heck.
Julie (Okami)
October 22, 2010
ooooo – love it!!
Tony Noland
October 22, 2010
Terrific story! I loved the twist and the last line was a killer!
Jax
October 22, 2010
That’s a great Halloween tale! Witches and horror and romance. Awesome.
David G Shrock
October 22, 2010
A nice turn on the classic grave dancing/summoning/kids making mischief in the graveyard theme. The hints are subtle and the end pays off.
Valerie
October 22, 2010
And yet, I wonder how he will feel about that kind of immortality… great tale.
Icy Sedgwick
October 22, 2010
I’ve heard urban legends like this before but you’ve really wrapped it up in a cracking good tale. When will people learn not to hang around in graveyards?! Anyway, I think it’s perfectly chilling.
Cathryn Louis
October 22, 2010
No wonder she knew the story so well!
J. M. Strother
October 22, 2010
Great ghost story within a ghost story. I liked this a lot.
~jon
Kari Fay
October 23, 2010
Loved this story- especially the rewards for dancing for nothing. Excellent writing!
Sam
October 23, 2010
Ohh, I’m all tingly after reading this. All the usual suspects: teenagers, graveyard, fog, witchy legend, and then you go and pull a magical little twist like that. Love, love, love this story. 🙂
Jessica Rosen
October 23, 2010
Gorgeous language as always, Gracie. The fog moving “in tatters and swirls,” for example. The story was terrific. I read it as a love story, but I’ve always been rather odd. Quite sweet and well done.
Take care,
Jess
Pamila Payne
October 23, 2010
I love the balance you strike between descriptive prose and realistic dialog. Really good story, and a very satisfying ending.
Cecilia Dominic
October 23, 2010
Loved it, Gracie! I didn’t see the twist that Trixie was the witch, so great surprise at the end! Man, losing part of your soul to ace finals — that’s a rough one. Also, the sentence about the oak keeping its secrets stood out, and makes perfect sense. Finally, nice job with the present tense. 🙂
CD
Roland D. Yeomans
October 23, 2010
The last line was literally a killer. A fantastic glimpse of a story I’d like to read more of. Your use of language is evocative and haunting. I’m glad I stumbled on your blog.
Come check out my short prologue to my YA urban fantasy, THE LEGEND OF VICTOR STANDISH.
http://rolandyeomans.blogspot.com/2010/10/hell-bound-busmonster-mash-entry-part.html
Have a great weekend.
Steve Green
October 24, 2010
Creeepeee. Teenagers+alcohol+graveyard+fog, ya just know things are gonna go wrong doncha?
A great telling, these characters are just begging to be in a movie. 🙂
Anthony Venutolo
October 24, 2010
I didn’t see the twist either but … no matter … it delivered in spades!!
Laura Eno
November 5, 2010
Awesome, Gracie and congrats on the Deathmatch Champion!